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Shifting Momentsby *venus-eclipse

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Updated: Hands, Guy's thumb, Guy's Eyes, Pointy Chin/Large chins, Guy's Body Pose, Guy's Shoulder Positions, MC's "falling" body.

This is the "title page" or promotional image for my newest visual novel, early in development. Please critique because I might still need to fix whatever is within my ability. If I can't or if it takes too much time, I'll use that advice for my next pieces. It's just because I don't want to repeat mistakes. Thanks!

I hope to give you guys more updates again soon! Story, character descriptions, and the rest of the information are still in the works. I rather have them edited with my alpha testers/concept analysts/idea bouncers/listen-to-every VN-related-thing-I-whine-about-and-don't-tell-me-they're-tired-of-it-people (whatever they're called) before I reveal them.

This is to show people who think I'm gone that I'm still working on things. I'll be adding journal entries in the Unbroken Hours group [link] on DA whenever I have more updates that doesn't involve art.

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~AyameJay Feb 25, 2013 New member Hobbyist

I like it~ Very well detailed, the background is beautiful.

*venus-eclipse Feb 27, 2013 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Thank you.

~TheKeeper81 Jan 27, 2013 Hobbyist Artist

Overall, I find it to be quite lovely. However, if you're looking to add some minor improvements, you may want to relieve the stiffness in both of their postures. For example, the boy could stand to have a bit more bend to the waist, with maybe a bit of curve to the back. Is his other arm around her? Maybe show more of a bend in that arm, with hand/fingers seen curving around her waist. Maybe arch his neck down, a bit, too. In the same vein, you can put a bit of a back arch to the girl's neck, angle the head a bit, maybe a bit more bend at the waist and upper back. Their hair could use a little bit more movement, as well.

*venus-eclipse Jan 28, 2013 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Thanks, hmm. I think I might be able to fix a few things from this that doesn't require redrawing and colouring things.

~Hysteria-Alice Jan 23, 2013 Hobbyist Artist

IT'S AKITO!!! IT'S AKITO!!!! FROM FRUITS BASKET! O.O

*venus-eclipse Jan 26, 2013 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Oh no!!! Now that you mentioned it, it's stuck in my brain. ^_^

~Hysteria-Alice Feb 2, 2013 Hobbyist Artist

lol! that just HAD to be said! XD sorry! But it WOULD be interesting to date Akito.

-SPOILERS-

Except....Akito is originally a girl! In the manga! There's more after episode 26! Trust me!

*venus-eclipse Feb 2, 2013 Hobbyist Digital Artist

I'm missing two manga volumes of Fruits Basket before I finish it. (I didn't want to mention Akito being a girl in case you didn't get there. xD).

I'm a big Shigure fan due to the manga.

~Hysteria-Alice Feb 4, 2013 Hobbyist Artist

mwahahahaha! OH SHIGURE! that DOG! XD I loved Shigure! he made everything funny!

~Hika-Tsu Jan 22, 2013 Student Digital Artist

The background is really nice, as well as the logo, but I agree with the others that the guy's eye looks kind of weird. I've played Frozen Essence, and this art is really a huge improvement. Thank you for drawing/making those VNs!

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